Perspective (ficlet; Saiyuki)

[opalmatrix]

Title: Perspective
Author: opalmatrix
Warnings: Description of a grisly event
Pairing(s): n/a;
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: Hakkai's history
Notes: Written for saiyuki_time prompt #12: Sense of Sight. Time allowed: 15 minutes. Time taken: 18 minutes. I guess I'm still not finished with Goku's headspace! [And as thewriter0 pointed out, I originally had the wrong eye missing for Hakkai ... thanks!]

Goku still remembered the day that Hakkai had lost his right eye ...

Comments

[freeradical9.livejournal.com]

Very nice. I really like Goku's innocence here. He genuinely doesn't understand the situation, but he's trying to. I especially like the conclusion that he arrives at in the end, that it was too bad that he couldn't have done more, but his actions produced a much, much better result than if he had done nothing at all. Good job.

[opalmatrix.livejournal.com]

My take on the Gojyo-Hakkai relationship comes mostly from the part early on in the Kami-sama arc when Goku and Hakkai are in the desert dreamscape inside the gourd. Hakkai is so clearly in loco parentis, and when he changes back from his youkai form, Goku is hugging him and saying he likes the regular Hakkai better. And in fact, he seems fascinated by Hakkai from the first - by the fact that he can fight more effectively than you'd guess, and that he has such pretty eyes. So I was thinking that this horrific scene would weigh pretty heavily on him, but that he'd be stretching himself to understand as much as he could. And Sanzo has given little indications that he really can be a very effective teacher, when he calms down.

I'm glad you liked it.